The whole thing. If I were to read that in my newspaper, I'd set it on fire.
1. Fake. How do you make such a bad error, especially after shoving that sentimental crap down our throats? Do you even watch the Red Sox?
2. Spell Check
3. Choose a different profession, or pay more attention in English class. Is that really you in that avatar? What do you think would happen if you told your friends, "b4 i was a twinkle in my dads eye?" If you told that me that story in person, I would instantly think of you as the most tawdry person I'd ever met. You sound like seabeachfred, and you're 13 years old.
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